JAIL BREAK
One
slightly smelly morning at prison a man woke up and said, “I could not believe
the smell!” He found out it was coming from the kitchen and it was his food
being served. It stunk and he thought he saw an eyeball inside and got sick. He
sat down and started thinking of a way out of the most enormous, rudest,
sickening prison of all time Alcatraz. He found a hole in the wall and said,
“how come I haven’t seen this yet how ironic” he ran through the hole and out
the other side and saw a guard.
I really like the way you have used a list of adjectives to describe the prison so the reader knows exactly what it is like. Next time see if you can use some other words instead of said.
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